Find the Mistakes!

[CaLLizeR]

I'm going to give you stories with several ( or a lot!) mistakes in them. Your task is to find the mistakes and correct them. The mistakes can be a grammatical mistakes and/or missing words.
Please make sure your corrections are noticeable

PS : I'm not sure this is the right place to post this thread. Feel free to move it if necessary.

------------------------------------------------------------------------------
The Ecology of Hollywood
PART 1

Los Angeles is a unlikely city. Built over major seismic fault, at the edge of one of the world most inhospitable desert, the city has developed like the extension of Hollywood movie set, a sprawling urban fantasy which many people feel should not really existed. Scientist have estimated that the land and waters in the area could naturally support 200,000 people, not the 15 millions that live there.

Since the 1880s, Los Angeles has been transformed from sleepy cattle town with population of 4,000, to a seething metropolis that now account for nearly one per cent of global greenhouse emissions. It is the car culture par excellence, with nine millions cars contributing to the ubiquitous smog and air pollution and 40% of the population suffering from respiratory problems due to vehicle emission. Surprisingly, LA is now become the forum for some of the most progressive environmental thought in the USA.

[sariayu]

CMIIW

Los Angeles is an unlikely city. Built over a major seismic fault, at the edge of one of the world's most inhospitable desert, the city has developed like the extension of a Hollywood movie set, a sprawling urban fantasy which many people feel should not really exist. Scientists have estimated that the land and water in the area could naturally support 200,000 people, not the 15 millions that live there.

Since the 1880s, Los Angeles has been transformed from a sleepy cattle town with a population of 4,000, to a seething metropolis that now account for nearly one percent of global greenhouse emissions. It is the car culture par excellence, with nine millions cars contributing to the ubiquitous smog and air pollution and 40% of the population are suffering from respiratory problems due to vehicle emissions. Surprisingly, LA has now become the forum for some of the most progressive environmental thought in the USA.

[Soul_Ripper]

Quoted from Sariayu:

-Paragraph 2:
Since the 1880s, Los Angeles has transformed from.....

By the way, is what I do okay? I mean, not crossing the rules or something?
If what I do is illegal for the game, just ignore my post

[CaLLizeR]

Hello, I'm back.
Sorry for the late reply, I was busy at the college.

@sariayu
There are still few mistakes that are still unspotted. There are also some unneeded corrections you made.

@soul_ripper
That's fine. But unfortunately, your answer was wrong.

I'll give you the answers by tomorrow. See you until then.

[se_sukez]

Los Angeles is an unlikely city. Built over major seismic fault, on the edge of one of the world's most inhospitable deserts, the city has developed like the extension of Hollywood movie set, a sprawling urban fantasy which many people feel should not really exist. Scientists have estimated that the land and water in the area could naturally support 200,000 people, not the 15 million that live there.

Since the 1880s, the Los Angeles has been transformed from sleepy cattle town with a population of 4,000, to a seething metropolis that now accounts for nearly one per cent of global greenhouse emissions. It is the car culture par excellence, with nine million cars contribute to the ubiquitous smog and air pollution and 40% of the population suffering from respiratory problems due to vehicle emissions. Surprisingly, LA is now becoming the forum for some of the most progressive environmental thought in the USA.

hmm.. maybe right, maybe wrong >.<.. .. nice thread

hmm. edited~. i bold the suffering -_-".

[CaLLizeR]

@se_sukes
You did a great job! Paragraph one is solved (you forgot to bold "deserts" btw, but that's fine). There is still one missing word and an unnecessary change in paragraph 2, which have been mentioned by Soul_Ripper! Let's see if you can find them.

[se_sukez]

@se_sukes
You did a great job! Paragraph one is solved (you forgot to bold "deserts" btw, but that's fine). There is still one missing word and an unnecessary change in paragraph 2, which have been mentioned by Soul_Ripper! Let's see if you can find them.

hmm.. suffering > suffer, is it right?

i don't know again hha.

[cRuZzeR]

Los Angeles is an unlikely city. Built over major seismic fault at the edge of one of the world's most inhospitable desert. The city has developed like the extension ofa Hollywood movie set, a sprawling urban fantasy where many people feel should not really existed. Scientists have estimated that the land and water in the area could naturally support 200,000 people, not the 15 million that live there.

Since the 1880s, Los Angeles has been transformed from a sleepy cattle town with population of 4,000, to a seething metropolis that now accounts for nearly one per cent of the global greenhouse emissions. It is the car culture par excellence, with nine million cars contributing to the ubiquitous smog, air pollution and 40% of the population suffering from respiratory problems due to vehicle emission. Surprisingly, LA has now become the forum for some of the most progressive environmental thought in the USA.

[[Le]Couture]

The Hollywood Ecology

Los Angeles is an unlikely city, which Built over major seismic fault, at the edge of one of the world most inhospitable desert. The city has developed like the extension of Hollywood movie set, where a sprawling urban fantasy which many people feel should not really exist. The Scientist have estimated that the land and waters in the area could be a naturally support for 200,000 people, not 15 million live there.

Since the 1880s, Los Angeles has been transformed from sleepy cattle town with 4,000 populations, a seething metropolis that now account for nearly one per cent of global greenhouse emissions. It is the car culture par excellence, with nine million cars contributing to the ubiquitous smog and air pollution and 40% of the population suffering from respiratory problems due to vehicle emission. Surprisingly, LA is now becoming the forum for some of the most progressive environmental thought in the USA.

[HazelnutLatte]

I'm going to give you stories with several ( or a lot!) mistakes in them. Your task is to find the mistakes and correct them. The mistakes can be a grammatical mistakes and/or missing words.
Please make sure your corrections are noticeable

PS : I'm not sure this is the right place to post this thread. Feel free to move it if necessary.

------------------------------------------------------------------------------
The Ecology of Hollywood
PART 1

Los Angeles is a unlikely city. Built over major seismic fault, at the edge of one of the world most inhospitable desert, the city has developed like the extension of Hollywood movie set, a sprawling urban fantasy which many people feel should not really existed. Scientist have estimated that the land and waters in the area could naturally support 200,000 people, not the 15 millions that live there.

Since the 1880s, Los Angeles has been transformed from sleepy cattle town with population of 4,000, to a seething metropolis that now account for nearly one per cent of global greenhouse emissions. It is the car culture par excellence, with nine millions cars contributing to the ubiquitous smog and air pollution and 40% of the population suffering from respiratory problems due to vehicle emission. Surprisingly, LA is now become the forum for some of the most progressive environmental thought in the USA.

what the . . ? ?
schol homework?!!?